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08-09-2007, 07:25 PM
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 A poem I want to read at my step daughter wedding Hello all , I have been asked to do a reading or poem for my s/daughters wedding, and so I wrote a poem I was hoping you could give me some feedback as to what you think ... appropriate? sappy? or ok here goes....(just a draft) Beyond The Roses May you love beyond the Roses, the lit candles will melt away Sow a seed of love and nurture it every day A love which teaches us to listen to read between the lines A love that continues to bless us thus standing the test of time A love that says I'm sorry when a wound is made A love soft and tender and sometimes sharp as a blade A love that cries for the other Feels a pain as one A love laughing through the hard times and in this strength -til the day is done If this love speaks after I'm gone And yours would do the same We have honored love greatly And she , blessing us with a golden flame      |
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08-09-2007, 07:32 PM
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| Oh!! thankyou so much , I was afraid that it was sort of sappy :-) I am more comfortable reading something I wrote than a reading from a book, although to be honest I may at the wedding rehearsal read the piece and be comfortable with it after all....... |
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08-09-2007, 09:08 PM
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| I think it's very sweet. It's so nice to have something personal instead of the same old quotes in my opinion. Go for it!
__________________ I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies. This is the dawning of the rest of our lives. --Green Day The more I see, the less I know, the more I'd like to let it go. --Red Hot Chili Peppers |
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08-10-2007, 02:54 PM
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| As a technical writer myself (which has nothing to do with writing poems, I know) and casual poet I can certainly value the effort and I think that your poem is fantastic, Old Soul. Furthermore, everybody will love it, indeed. It expresses emotions way better than any other public speaking speech could ever do. Regards.
__________________ “Once you incorporate the millionaire's mindset, set goals, chase your dreams with a burning desire and get motivated on a daily basis, success becomes inevitable.” by me. |
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08-10-2007, 03:27 PM
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Weddings are the time when sappy is what you want. Its very, very well chosen. |
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