Feedback on my writing

[Ryan24]

Hi there guys. I just wrote a post here Philosophy of Sport : clearmindblog.com and really focused on my writing this time. I know I have great ideas and the mindset. Now I am working on honing my writing. Thank you, I really appreciate any feedback.

[Stu]

Hi Ryan,

I can tell you put effort into that post but your writing does still need work.

First, you're missing a word here and there (for example, your third sentence should read "Now all you have to do is dodge..."). This happens to me if I do my proof-reading right after I write a post. My mind kind of fills in the blanks with the words I've left out or spelled wrong. Try to write your post, do something else for a bit, and then come back and proof-read it, paying particular attention to every word.

The big problem though is that a lot of your sentences are just a little off grammatically, they just don't flow properly. For example, "Athletes were the ones who get the juices flowing" should be either 'Athletes are the ones who get the juices flowing' or 'Athletes were the ones who got the juices flowing'. Your tenses are conflicting.

My advice would be to read more. To be a good writer you need to write a lot and you need to read a lot. Reading more will help to develop a keen eye for these kinds of problems.

Hope that helps, and whatever you do don't give up!

[Ryan24]

That was a very helpful post. I cannot tell you how much I appreciate that. Thank you.