My charity idea

[angelo]

Hi, I have come up with an idea recently that I have been thinking about for ways to help less blessed people and animals then us, below is a copy of the e-mail I have been sending out to colleges in the country, right now I am just sending it out to all the colleges athletic directors, and volunteer clubs in hopes that they would forward it to all the schools athletic teams and sports clubs I would really like to hear your opinions on how I could improve this and ways to get it out there better. I have been thinking that I need to find an online volunteering organization that could devot several people to it, but I haven't found one yet btw, ok here it is.

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Hello, I'm a student that has been recently thinking about ways to help less fortunate people and animals, I have come up with an idea that I think could really impact thousands and hopefully millions of lives, along with raising money for the organizaions providing the services.
It started with an idea I had for my rugby team to raise money, I proposed the idea of walking dogs for money, we would raise money for our team by fund-raising on the idea that for every dollar donated to the team we would walk one dog at the local shelter. This works time wise because if the average team or other organization has 40 people each person would only have to volunteer once every 4 or 5 weeks. This breaks down like this, 4 people on a team would go for three hours to the shelter were they could each take 9 dogs for a walk or run for 20 minutes. This would allow 32 dogs to be walked during that time, if the team volunteered twice a week then each volunteer would only have to go to the shelter once every 5 weeks for 3 hours, but 64 dogs could be walked every week.
Each team could print out a single paper handout to be given to each member with the idea for the fund raising to show to the potential givers, or they could set up a stand in the union building, I think around campus students would gladly give up to 5 dollars for such a cause and faculty and other older members of the community would probably give up to 20 or more dollars. I think teams could easily raise 5,000 dollars each semester for there organization and bigger teams such as football teams with 100 men on the roster could easily raise much more. All this money could go to the teams for there personal use as the dogs would still be getting walked or other services provided at the shelters or they could agree to donate part of the earnings to the ASPCA or other charity, I think 20-60 % of donations should be stressed to give to the ASPCA or other charities as the team would still have a significant financial benefit.
I then started getting the idea that I could e-mail this plan to every colleges athletic director, and volunteer organization, in hopes that they would forward it to all the schools sports teams, and college clubs such as the rugby club and geology club, it could also be e-mailed to all the churches in the community.
Here are a list of some of the potential recipients of this idea via e-mail
Every college in the U.S
Every church in the U.S
Every high school and middle school in the U.S
All the major newspapers,

In the future it's possible that this e-mail could also be translated and e-mailed to every University in the world, church, etc...

I have also thought about including other charitable causes to include in the E-mail as to give all the organizations receiving it, more choices for charitable causes to raise money, such as for every dollar donated we will spend 30 minutes in a children's hospital, or for every dollar donated we will serve five meals at a local soup kitchen etc. I think the list should have about 10 or so other charitable ideas, because every sports team and club of a University couldn't possibly volunteer at the ASPCA or humane shelters there would simply be too many people. Some of the charities I was thinking about putting on it were, Children's Hospitals, Homeless and Abuse shelters, Orphanages, Big Brother organizations, the ASPCA, the Humane society, Camps for blind children, local Environmental causes, Soup kitchens, I haven't thought of all the ideas yet and would be looking forward to your ideas, or your organization could decide that.

I know this idea sounds like a lot of work with all the e-mails going out, but if a few people or volunteers is able to help I think it would go by rather easily as all e-mails can be found on the website. I hope to hear back from you with your input or any suggestions you might have. If this was not the correct recipient please forward it to whom ever it may concern. Thanks very much for your time and compassion.

Sincerely,

Angelo Leon
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[Lauxa]

Hello Angelo,

It sounds like you are really excited about this idea! That is wonderful. But in my opinion, the thing that will motivate others to try this idea is if you can implement it successfully with your rugby team. I would advise you not to involve too many people until you have a working model.

Just my thoughts.

[Amandaaa]

I think this is a great idea.


I agree with Lauxa though-- test out your idea first...and try it on your own rugby team, so you can prove that it works. and then present these suggestions to other schools, asking them to join in the movement.

Also: I would try to make the email a little bit easier to read. No matter how good your ideas are, you need to present them in a clear and concise way-- otherwise, the reader will be confused and turned off.

Maybe you should try breaking it up into smaller paragraphs... and conclude with a simplified step-by-step list of things that they could immediately do. or a bulleted list of things that you plan on doing, if they make the commitment. Even if you're just seeking ideas, I would edit it a little and clarify what exactly you want from the reader.

...and be sure to include more detailed contact information. I would at least include a phone number that they can reach you at, in case they have any questions or whatever.


This is a really good idea, though- so I think you should definitely pursue it. Just play around with it some more, and make it more concrete.