Please Help Me Calibrate My Writing Style

[Ralph]

I just love this forum for the amount of feedback I can receive. I have created my blog three months ago and I think it is time to ask for feedback and calibrate my writing style. I am now going to edit and revise what I've written to make it clearer, more interesting and appealing.

Having a message is one thing, but writing is an art and I am a student. I now ask other students to help me on my path to mastery. I am most open to any kind of feedback. I lovingly accept any seemingly negative suggestions and I'm very grateful that you cared enough to express your point of view honestly.

Please focus on the writing. I am already going to change my layout to something lighter and introduce some pictures to make the text blocks less intimidating. It's the writing style that I'm still not sure how to calibrate.

• Which of my articles are written better or worse than others?
• What seem to be a repetitive negative patterns in my writing?
• Are my posts too long? Should I make my points shorter and my articles more dense?
• Is my writing too dull? Should I use a more sophisticated language?
• What is the first thing you'd change if you were me?

This are the first articles I have written in January:

Harness Your Unlimited Subconscious Potential
Facing Bad Luck Consciously

The articles that I consider my best content-wise, describing philosophies:

Giving Advise: Bragging or Inspiring?
The Nature of Relationships

Articles describing specific techniques:

Reality Check: Calibrate Your Life
Active Nap: Rest Productively!

The two longest articles I have written:

Vibration Manifestation Is At Work!
The Nature of Relationships


Thank you so much!

Ralph

[RT Wolf]

All of that stuff depends on your goal. What's your goal with your writing? To entertain, to inform, to change, to give food for thought?

You might also wanna read Made to Stick. I think that improved my writing.

[Ralph]

Of course, I want to create positive change in reader's lives. I want to inspire, expose to new beliefs and challenge.

[AGBourne]

You want to learn how to write properly but then let it go.

You want to develop your own way of writting and communicating.

RTWolf said it best:

"All of that stuff depends on your goal. What's your goal with your writing? To entertain, to inform, to change, to give food for thought?"

[Ralph]

I've decided to take a vocabulary course and read some books about humour and inspirational writing. I haven't yet found the best of te resources, if you know a book about writing that could be applied in a personal development blog, please let me know.

I'm still open to any kind of feedback

[Grandiouse]

First, congrats on getting your blog started. I've got one going myself.

I read Ralph Dudek’s blog :: Emotional Mastery Psychology of Success :: Facing Bad Luck Consciously "Facing Bad Luck Conciously"

Nice length on your article. You certainly have lots of good stories and examples.

What I had a hard time with was keeping focus while reading. There seemed to be a lot of lead-in questions that were used, but they lacked the explainations. Balance out the stories/examples with more explaining of theory/philosophy. Cut a little bitof the length and get to the main points first.

Hope this helps.

[Halffull]

Two great resources I've been using:

The Elements of Style (Just turned 50 apparently)

Write to Done

[Lauxa]

I read Ralph Dudek’s blog :: Emotional Mastery Psychology of Success :: Facing Bad Luck Consciously as well. In general, I enjoyed the article and found it relevant and unique. It would have been nice to shorten it a bit if possible.

You might really need to hire an editor if English isn't your first language, your grammar is pretty rough in places. Your biggest problem is with verb tenses and getting all your tenses to agree. For instance:

Ever since I have started my business at at Pro-Tibia.com based on online game Tibia I had a feeling that this is just temporary. My growth and life’s purpose would eventually take me to the blogger/author/speaker/consultant career. I was very happy with active income I am earning.

Look at the verbs: have started, had, was, am

If you rewrite so that all the verbs are in past tense, you get this:

Ever since I started my business at at Pro-Tibia.com based on [the] online game Tibia I had a feeling that this was just temporary. My growth and life’s purpose would eventually take me to the blogger/author/speaker/consultant career. I was very happy with [the] active income I was earning.

I'll PM you with some other feedback on this article, I spent a bit of time looking it over.

[Ralph]

Facing Bad Luck Consciously was my first article. The grammar there is worst of all the articles because the machinery in my head was a little rusty. Still, no excuses because I'm not where I want to be yet

I love you so much for all that help Lauxa. I think it's amazing that a stranger cares so much as to give me advice and opportunity to improve. I'm going to make the best of it!


Thanks for the resources Halfful, I'm going to digest them as soon as I get back home


Grandiouse, the most important feedback for me was that you had a hard time keeping focus. I'm going to tweak my articles until this changes. No focus, no impact. No impact, no positive change for my readers, and that's what I want to accomplish.

Much obliged!
Ralph