My New Software - Sales Page Critique - Free If You Help Out

[Lucas]

Originally Posted by VacMan

Lucas,

And everyone else.

Thank you, seriously, thank you for your help!

I'm at the point right now where I'm just going to take action with the page, the way it is.

I may not be the best copywriter, but we'll see how the page does for sales.

Depending on test results, I'll come back here and revisit suggestions and start tweaking.

But I think there's just no way to know without testing.

I've just gone so far, I want to let it happen and start tweaking from there.

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On a side note:

Does anyone know any good PPC resources other than Perry Marshal?

Thanks a ton!
-Sean

That's the best thing you can do! Just test and see what happens!

Don't be afraid to make drastic changes either! If it converts, great, but always test to see if it can convert better!

[Spiritual]

Since I always enjoy people following up on their promisses, I think it's time to allow Vacman to fullfill his. As he said in this topictitle, free if the help was contributing to his site development. And observant as I am, I've seen quite some valuable input, I think quite some people here deserve to enjoy the software for free.

So Vacman, Show them the money! Or in this case, Show them the software!

[AlmostGone]

Originally Posted by Spiritual

Like Ellie said, the website really looks like a scam. Been reading and looking at affiliate marketing last couple of days, and everywhere you see these kind of websites. It's just horror and I can't understand why anyone is making sales through those websites.

Maybe it's my dutch personality that keeps me from believing all what those websites offer, maybe it's just general intelligence....

Anyways, I'm not sure what to expect with your program, but I would lose the "Eat all you want and still lose fat like you're taking a dump"-idea.

Be realistic in your marketing, tell what it does and what it doesn't. There are enough people offering all these quick-fixxes, and that's all nice and shaggy ofcourse, people are always looking for quick-fixxes. But you can show if you're an ethical salesperson or not just by saying what you're offering right here, right now!

And seriously, who is reading those long salestalks? Just tell in short what your program does and what not, show the high quality vid (only host it on youtube as a way of marketing outside your website, but for marketing purposes ON your website, use your own hosting to host the video).
And show a link to the orderform and you're done. And for me personally the pictures of people who lost enormous weights are the same you see on tellsell, try to be different and unique. Those pictures aren't motivating me to get it, I've heard to much about the broken promises.... And I'm a person who lost 30kg's in 8 weeks, so I pretty much know what's possible and what's not. Right now when I'm looking at your website and product I'm just thinking "Ah another one of those same old same old".

Show why you and your product are different, be real!

Oh and you might building a more professional and complete website, these templates can be found for free aswell and really add to your reliability. You might consider adding a forum, where people can share their experiences and you can offer some support. If your product really does what you say you can gain massive trust by adding a forum like that. And on the website you can add the articles about why your product works. And you in the future you can even use your website to add new products, maybe you will write a book about how to use your software.

It's all possible!


Btw, I was not trying to break you or your product down, just telling how I experience what you want feedback on.

Good luck!

I agree with each and every point you've made (including GOOD LUCK). I actually wish I'd written this. Spot On.

On edit: The second user's pictures don't look legit. Same clothes, pose, background and lighting. Just a much better build.

[maclinda]

Have you thought of promoting and selling this through Clickbank? Their order form is MUCH simpler, and doesn't ask as many pesky questions.

Also, how about affiliates? I have a weight loss clinic and am always looking for quality affiliate products to list for my patients. If that's a possibility, please pm me.

Oh, and yes, I'd like to look at the software.

[ken nubo]

I do Internet Marketing and WOW, your friggin sale page rock.

It just reeks of professionalism with the pretty graphics.

Good job. I recommend selling your item on clickbank.

[VacMan]

Spiritual,

Thanks for holding me accountable, and I intend on keeping my promise.

Anyone who has helped and wants the product please PM me and I'll send you the link.

maclinda,

Thanks for the clickbank recommendation, I think you're right and I'm most likely going to switch over to them and I will be looking for good affiliates as well.

PM me and I'll send you the link to the software and if you like it then we can discuss options.

ken nubo,

Thanks for the kind words!

[rebelwithacause]

Hey everyone,

It looks like the comments are right on. I think that it looks great, has a lot of professionalism to it etc...
And the long sales letters can be a bit cheesy at times...but for some odd reason they work well...

Just keep it as "real" as possible...a good story always helps win the day.

The one thing about marketing on the internet as someone else mentioned is testing, testing, testing...

Split test different approaches like headlines, subtitles etc...and see what pulls better...

Sometimes even little thing like color, bolding a headline, and font can make a huge difference.

One thing that I would recommend highly is to add a video intro, maybe you have that on
your squeeze page before your little infomercial...

Adding Multi-Media can change your conversion hundreds of percent...also, I'm not sure if you have a landing page prior to your sales page?

It's crucial that you collect the emails of people that visit your site and don't buy...so you can follow up with them in an autoresponder...giving them good content about your product...

Also, you can offer other people's products through affiliate links that compliment yours...and increase your income, as well as adding additional value to your customers...

It's a win-win all the way around...

The days of "static" web sites and sales pages are pretty much history...people want to feel the energy of the product, and the person selling it...

I hope that helps...

also, adding audio testimonials is huge!

Take care,