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Old 05-08-2009, 12:10 AM   #141 (permalink)
Rebecca800
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Hi Yoopersmith

OOH I am so jealous of your site concept!!

Your homepage video about consciousness is awesome.... where can I find it on Google vids, I'd really like to put this on my site too... (if you dont mind!)

You asked for a little critique so here are some ideas for your homepage. I havent read the rest of your site yet but I certainly will, your concept is so cool.

I think your homepage text doesn't do your niche justice... for a few reasons:

- you could work in more concepts from the first video to get people REALLY excited exploring the site. Perhaps split it into sub headings: quantum physics, fractals, holographic universe, consciousness controls reality, etc.

- Im not sure who your audience is, but from the videos it suggests your going for a smart / scientific approach. The thing about The Secret, What The Bleep, etc is that parts of them are dumbed down and thats where I lost interest. So I'd like to see your site put forward a more scientific, analytical point of view, in keeping with the videos. At the moment the text seems a bit touchy feely, not enough facts and education. Thats something your videos convey quite well, and if you could replicate that style in your homepage text... wow!

- your first section tells us a lot about you (which is not a bad thing, SBI is all about bringing your personality to a website) but this belongs on an About Me page. Your homepage is to compel people to dive in, by offering an overview of your site concept and how it will benefit them. In short, too many words about who you are, not enough about philosophies of consciousness. You have limited space to get your message across!

So if it were my site I'd aim to summarize the contents of that first video on your homepage because its such an excellent concept and its already laid out for you. Also, since this is quite an involved subject, dont be afraid to make your homepage a little longer. Thats your #1 sales page for your website, so make it work for you!

Best of luck!!

PS I notice you have a page on Paraliminals - if you are at the monetizing stage you could sign up to the Learning Strategies affiliate program? Also you have a sub heading "Dream Play - coming soon" - I have written up this product with a review if it helps you: Paraliminals Dream Play CD by Learning Strategies
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