The content is very good and certainly fits with what I've been taught about critical thinking, but the structure could use a little work. If you're going to use outline format, the sub-topics (1, 2, 3, etc in this case) need to be indented. I would suggest, however, that you switch to a more conventional heading-paragraph format, like Steve's blog postings. In other words, use the topics labeled with the Roman numerals as a heading and combine the rest into a supporting paragraph or two. Your writing will flow better that way.
I also found a few grammatical errors, such as "Look beyond obvious" (sec. viii-2, missing a "the") and "Many times you can’t get different results from the same experiment and some people some of the results and say that it’s a cause and effect relationship, but it is not." (sec. iv-2, confusing wording, specifically "some people some of the results"). That's not all, but I hope you get the drift.
Anyway, you're off to a great start, though. Your message is good and covers a topic that everyone should know more about. If you can polish it up a little, it will really shine.
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