[Matthew Shea]

Since you asked what I think, I'll be straightforward: it needs work. Please take my criticism in the constructive spirit in which it's given.

For one, your conclusion is weak and doesn't relate to the ponderings in your introduction at all. Also, the introduction and most of the body of the text don't relate to the title. There's no structure anywhere and you seem to ramble from one thought to the next without any attempt at organizing those thought patterns. You have a lot of good ideas in there, but you need to add some structure and logic to them. For example, you don't clearly tie in your points on peer pressure to how it affects our morality. After that, you jump to the next two paragraphs with no effort to tie them to any of the previous content.

Perhaps what you've written should be broken up into half a dozen postings, each of which can be expounded on and further explained. I think that's probably the root of the problem here: you're not fully explaining yourself. Right vs. wrong is an extremely complicated topic, after all, and trying to cover it all in seven paragraphs isn't going to do it justice.