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Originally Posted by Angela  Hi, mlc82! Good for you, for taking it upon yourself to make a difference in this very important part of people's lives -- fitness, vitality, and well-being.
Your article starts of by telling people not to fear, it's not as scary as they think to get in shape. I would like to suggest to you that it's not so much fear that keeps people from getting started, but inertia. Maybe you would like to rethink starting off by telling them not to be afraid (and thereby planting a suggestion that there's something to be afraid of  ), but to give them a big bang of inspiration. What would have them leap up off their sofa and move around a little bit? What would inspire them to eat revitalizing food? Why should they bother? It might be helpful to instill inspiration throughout the article, rather than just listing the benefits at the end.
Especially about getting fit, I'd much rather move towards something than try to get away from something. |
Good point... now to think of something to start with.
"Wanna lose that gut, build some muscle, and get more sex?"...
that would work for me but probably wouldn't make for the best intro