Thread: Poem: Struggle
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Old 02-02-2008, 03:42 AM   #2 (permalink)
Adrienne
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I enjoyed it very much. And yes i got he was in a coma.
Your last stanza definitely flows the best

i would suggest changing "I cry just for fun. " to I cry for fun simply because it fits with the syllable counts better and makes it flow smoother.

Very nice.. sad tho
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